Sorry for the shameless self-promotion but I'm in the final stages of post-production on a film and wanted to get feedback from people who don't know me or care if they hurt my delicate feelings. So, where better to go than OGM?
It's a short film about the struggles of a recently returned soldier living on the streets. Since I'm just attaching the trailer (which is very short), I'm just curious what you think of the mood, the look and the few fragments of story/theme and if it makes you actually want to watch the film. Also, any comments on the topic would be appreciated as I'm also doing a documentary on the lives of homeless veterans and would be curious to know if you have any thoughts or suggestions.
Thanks so much.
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P.S. If you never got a chance to see my last one, it was about an apocalyptic religious cult. Quite fun: http://www.cultofeden.com
Haunting piano- I love it.
If possible, lower the background highway noise, and bump the dialogue track. I had a hard time making out the specific dialogue.
I would extend this to a full minute: who is this guy? where has he been discharged from? is he homeless?
None of the are addressed in the teaser.
wow, short is right. i'm kind of a film buff, so with the caveat that the trailor is almost always better than the movie- i think it's terrific. i also agree with zaphod's recommendations. planning on checking out your previous effort, thanks for the links.
Thanks so much for your comments! I truly appreciate your taking the time to do this.
The main reason the trailer is so short is because the film itself is short (approx. 8 minutes). So, with a longer trailer there'd be little reason to watch the actual film. Should have been more clear about that. Sorry.
I'll definitely rework the audio so the dialogue is clear. Glad you liked the pianos. I actually wrote that for an earlier film of mine that got derailed. Thought it was ideal for this trailer.
As for the character, he's a recently returned Marine vet with a leg injury (the character is loosely based on my cousin who was shot in the leg in Iraq) who has had his hours cut at his job and has ended up living in his car and walking to and from work to save money. It follows him on his walk home and he's offered a ride. The guy who picks him up gets a feel for his situation but can't think of much else to do other than give him a few beers from his groceries in the car and wish him luck.
Basically, I want the film to make the audience live in this guys shoes, in his isolation - both socially and psychologically - and then confront their own apathy toward our "heros" once they've left the battlefield. But, without being preachy or heavy-handed.
Again, thanks so much for your insightful and generous words. It really is a great help.
I'll keep you posted on when it's finalized and let you good folks get a "sneak peak" at it before the festivals.
I look forward to it. :-)
I agree with the above! The atmosphere seems as you want it. Looks good quality. Seems intriguing...
My one suggestion is - my take on it from the trailer is that he was traveling somewhere - that it is about the journey. From what you said though, maybe more demonstrative of that would be him walking along and have him getting into the car (or the car just stopping) indicating the ride is going to be some kind of change ---- which it turns out it really isn't, of course.
I guess what I'm trying to say is I was kind of puzzled why it showed him leaving the car - and then walking again (seems like you're almost giving away your end of nothing really changing...)
Really great, though.
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